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What a frightful thing, a heart.
It frets and flounders,
Not sure where to go.
As innocent as a child.

What do I do with you?

How does one coddle a child,
To change its ways?
Love it, keep it,
Careful not to smother it.

Give it the time to grow,
To see life in a new light...
For sunshine shall rise out of the night,
And love comes and goes.

Shall you call it your own?
Teach it to call you its keeper?
For surely, it knows you,
Wants to be with you.

I give over its custody to you...
Please, hold it gently and with care.
Show it a world anew,
One to share with you.
Another poetic attempt of mine, to someone very dear to me. As always, constructive criticism is welcome. Let me know what you think :)
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ChristyReserva Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"How does one coddle a child,
To change its ways?
Love it, keep it,
Careful not to smother it"

Love this stanza. To coddle a child is to love it but not smother it. Sometimes I like to think that it's as easy as it comes when in reality, if I had my own, I wouldn't know exactly where to start. "To change its ways" can be too perplexing and complex and I like the way you wrote this in such a way that you know there are boundaries to nurture and show affection but that love itself is really simple. Not sure if that made sense but I wanted to explain how something so important as caring for another being is probably not as complicated as it should be. ^^ ; And then I read the last stanza to see that I know very little about the other side to this situation and the logistics behind it. I somehow sensed the change in tone from the beginning to the end that there's trust and loyalty and hope after feeling uncertainty and reluctance to giving away something so precious.
Naiah57 Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As a poet myself I love the warmth I can feel within the poem,
The whole poem just pulls me in and makes me smile making me warm
Thank you. It was me attempting to express my frustration, love, trust, and hope in words. Glad you enjoyed it.
Naiah57 Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Mmm I enjoy poetry in any form cause it helps me write, though this really doesn't just seem like an attempt you seem pretty well versed in writing poetry imho, keep up the great writing :+devwatch: i think reading your writing will help me improve greatly
Alright, I will most more later tonight then. I have a few more that you might like :)
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